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Unforgettable Moments in My Life
There had been many unforgettable moments in my life. I would like to mention one of these.
Once I was traveling from Karachi to Lahore by train. I was in first class, so there were only few passengers, with me. At a particular station, they all got off. Now I was completely alone in the compartment.
After sometime, a smart lady entered the compartment and sat next to me. She had a very clever plan to rob me. She said to me that if I did not hand over all the money to her which I had, she would complain to the railway police that I had robbed her. When I heard this dreadful speech I was completely and absolutely pass puzzled. I hit a plan to save myself from the wicked plan of that lady. I therefore pretended that I was a deaf and a dumb fellow and requested to write in a piece of page what she wanted to say. She gladly wrote her demand on the piece of paper and handed it to me. I change my seat and took the piece of writing. The railway police come and asked as what the matter was. The women as clever as she was burst into admits so she told that I had robber her of a thousand rupees. At first he seemed to believe in her story, but when I gave the piece of writing to the police, the women turned pale. She was caught red-handed and this way I saved from her wicked plan.

Pakistan As You See in the 21st Century
When the Muslims of India demanded a separate homeland for themselves, many people thought that the establishment of Pakistan was impossible. But Pakistan did come into being. It has not only survived many difficulties but has also made great progress in every field. Its survival and development have surprised all.

We would like to see Pakistan at its best in 21st century, in the past years we enabled and demoralize.
Unfortunately, Pakistan has not been politically very stable. But there is no need for despair. The people Pakistan agree on fundamental issues and priorities.
In the economic field, hopes must be brighter. In 1947, we were a poor agricultural country growing a few crops. Very soon our country began to be industrialized. Its dependence on agriculture would be lessened.
Pakistan has taken a very short period in becoming a semi-industrial country. This fact gives us the hope that there would be even faster development in the coming years. We have step in computer world and the other modern technology and expected that in 21st century the computer will be the part of every department even the advancement is expected because the new coming generation is comparatively more intelligent than before. The modern schools and institutions are preparing the staff better than the before. We have already entered in manufacturing of many modern electronic equipment in future like in 21st century Insha Allah Pakistan will send settelite in space. Pakistani scientist will conquer the space. As the Allama Iqbal saying there is more world after the stars.
All these hopes are not just wild dreams. They have a solid foundations. They are founded on the fact that people of Pakistan are intensely devoted to their country. They want to make it a great country and for this, they are ready to make every effort and sacrifice. Moreover, they are true Muslims with firm faith in Allah.

Importance of Science As a Subject in Curriculum
The nature has many secrets buried in it. It is the science which has scratched the mask from the face of nature. Science has always helped the man in every chamber of life. The importance of science as a subject in school curriculum can be understood from the fact that science acts as a pillar in the man's knowledge and when the youths are provided with this pillar from the very beginning, they are sure to be successful. Through this subject students are able to know the process going on in nature. The understanding of science gives the students the actual concept of phenomenon that is what is going on behind a particular process. The students can make a great increment in their knowledge by having a deep study on science, so that they are able to know the general activities.
Hence the science is a very useful guide which introduces the students with the techniques of nature.

A Picnic
We were given a special holiday after our annual prize distribution. So me and my friends made a programme and set out accordingly for the picnic at the beach in the morning. We reached there at 9'O clock. We unpacked our things in a hut. My friends wanted to go for boating so we hired a boat to carry us to the island of Manora. We decided to do fishing so we all started with great hopes but only a small quantity of fish was caught. We reached the island after enjoying ourselves on the sea. We cooked the fish and enjoyed a grand lunch. In the evening we had tea and spent a good time till the sunset.
We waded in water. Waves after waves were coming and passing us finally splashing on land. We also rode the horses and camels, it was very exciting.
The scene of the setting sun was really superb. As the sun sank we packed our things and after few minutes were back with the memories of the whole day to cur heart' desire.
Importance of Trees
Trees and plants are living things. They grow form seed and after a training maturity they die. Trees are of significant importance for us. We cannot under estimate their value in our surroundings. Trees adorn our surroundings. They produce oxygen without which we cannot live. They are source of fruits and cereals for us. Trees provide us wood which we use in building houses and furniture. Wood of trees is used as fuel. They play vital role in changing climate of a region. Many useful medicines are prepared from herb and plants for removing our ailments. Trees are a bounty for us and we should grow them where ever we can.

Life in a Big City
"God made country Men made the town."
Pakistan is a land of diverse beauty with 70% of her population living in villages spread all over the land and the rest live in cities and towns.
Life in city is very fast and busy one. Take life of people in big cities like Karachi, Lahore, Rawal Pindi or Peshawar. It is of course, not free from tension, worries and problems. The main problems are urbanization, housing, transport, shortage of water and pollution. People living in big cities do not get pure food like milk, butter, cheese and curd. They gets stale vegetables to eat. Another deadly and frightening problem that has recently waled freely into big cities is terrorism. This problem has shaken the mind and disturbed the peace of every citizen.
People living in big cities are generally selfish and self centered. They do not fellow feelings in them. The population is divided into classes the rich, middle class and the poor.
Although there are better opportunities and scope for education, health and jobs in a big city but as a whole life in a big city is full of hazards, problems, corruption and crimes.

My Favourite Hobby
A hobby can be almost anything a person like to do in his spare time. Because the "Idle Mind is Devil's workshop" therefore those who have developed a hobby never need to worry about what to do with their newly founded leisure hours.
Every person in the world has a hobby of his own. There are many kinds of hobbies such as gardening, stamp collecting, hiking, coin collecting, photography, listening to music and so forth. Girls to pursue some hobbies. Their hobbies differ from those of the boys. Girls mostly like hobbies such as cooking, stitching dresses, painting and listening to music.
Among all the hobbies mentioned above I like painting. It is a subtle hobby. Whenever I get time I sit down with my paint box, canvas, brushes and paint beautiful landscape. My hobby does not infringe on the rights of other people. It is not a noisy hobby like music. I can also earn money by selling my paintings to lover of fine arts. My hobby fills my heart with joy and colours and there it is my favourite hobby.
Sir Wilham Osler said:
"No man is really happy or safe without a hobby."

Health is Wealth
No one can deny the fact that healthy man live happily. Money or wealth cannot give a person all the happiness of life as health can. A person may have wealth, cars, servants at his service and a big house to life in cannot enjoy all these blessings without a good health. Where as a person with small income, with no servant for work and small house to live in but a healthy body enjoy a fuller life in the world.
For good health and for looking younger and living longer one must follow few good principles of life. To remain healthy we should eat balance diet. Take little exercise everyday. Let not worries crowd our mind and shake our nervous system. We should not allow ill thoughts bring agony to our mind. We should live in clear and neat surrounding. We must become early risers and never go to bed very late.
Good health is a precious thing and every step must be taken to guard it. Early to bed early to rise makes all men healthy, wealthy and wise.
My Aim in Life
Every one has an aim in life but those who do not have are dull souls and they curse their life for all time. In other words we can say a person without an aim in life is like a car without a driver. People have different aims in life. Some aspire to become rich, some like to become doctor, engineers, business men, executives in a big company, banker, lawyer, musician, artist and so forth.
I desire to lead a life different from others. I don't crave fro wealth not like to serve people as doctor or like who say that they want to become a teacher and spread light and knowledge.
My ambition in life may sound odd to you. I like to become a comedian. It is not an easy task to become a comedian. Only one person out of million can become a good comedian. People in our country belonging to different class and age live a very depressed life. All have problems and they give me a gloomy look. I I can become a comedian and make my people cheerful or bring some happy moments in their sad life. i think I would have really rendered great service to my nation. After Lehri, we have two such people like Moen Akhter and Omer Sharif in our country who made sad people's life cheerful. I always dream to become a great comedian and pray to God to help me fulfill my goal in life.

A Street Accident
I read about road accidents in newspaper every day. They bring agony to our mind and also to the relatives of victims, but till the day I had not seen an accident with my own eyes. By God what a terrible sight it was!
It was in the short hour of one evening I was going along Burns Road to buy a pen for my examination which was going to commence next week. At Denso Hall I was waiting for the traffic to clear off so that I could safely cross the road. A bus was also running along the road and it was trying to overtake a private car a head of it. All of a sudden driver lost the control of steering and rammed against a horse carriage. The driver of the hackney carriage fell down and the bus crushed him. The passengers in the hackney carriage escaped death with some injuries. The horse was also badly wounded and it was looking for his master. The injured were rushed immediately to a nearby hospital.
People gathered at the scene of accident. Some showing sympathy for the victim, some abusing the bus driver and some advising others to be very careful while on a road.
I left the scene with a sorrowful heart for the driver of the carriage who unfortunately lost his life in that accident.

Responsibilities of a Good Student
Students are the future hopes of any country. Much development and progress of the country depends upon them. Students are the backbone of a nation.
There are many responsibilities of a good student. The major one is that he/she should take keen interest in his/her studies. Moreover good student should also take part in games as "All work and no paly make Jack a dull boy." Besides this student should also take part in the scout activities so as to help other fellow students.
A good student should also make effort to develop the sense of responsibility in other fellow mates. He/She should also try to keep his/her locality clean.
A good student should be loyal and obedient to the teachers because "Obedience is the key to the door of success."
A good student must know the true meaning of trust, self esteem, obedience and confidence. MOreover a good student should always keep away from the politics of big power.

Computer a Curse or Blessing
Computer is a modern and best invention in the world. As the time goes on computer goes on developing. computer is used in industries, offices, schools and research work. We can get all information through the Internet. Today computers are found every where.
Here are the few examples of areas in which computers are used. computer helps in offices to store all kind of information and we take back information from its memory as we require. Computer makes calculations of all sorts, prepare business letters and books. Computer is used in billing departments. Airlines and Railways use computer Technology in making tickets for the passenger, keeping and updating the departure and arrival timings of planes and trains.
Computers are being used to conduct lessons for all subject, students are learning through computers by reading as well as seeing diagrams on screen. Computer are helping the doctors to detect disease and keep information about patient.
Everything has its advantages as well as disadvantages. The workers which works in factories and industries are no more needed because of automatic processing and work in these factories and industries thus creating deficiencies in job opportunities 

 

Student Composition 7:
Mobile Phones on Campus

Communication revolution has brought a great convenience (1) to modern society and people. Especially, the occurrence of mobile phone, in a way (2), has changed the world where we live. Maybe the mobile phone was a luxury for (3) only a few a decade ago. Now, it is no exaggeration (4) to say that the difference between the part (5) and the present is as vast as that between earth and heaven. With no exception (6), campus students also fall into the category called “cell-phone school” (7).
The present time is seeing a mobile phone boom on our campus (8), especially in big cities like Beijing, Shanghai, Guangzhou and etc. Statistics show that about one out of every seven college students possess a cell-phone (9). According to the mentioned above (10), the advantages of the mobile phone are obvious. Firstly, you can talk to your relatives or friends who may live thousands of miles from you via it (11). Your can carry it around wherever you go. Secondly, you don’t have (12) a notebook for phone numbers in that (13) they can be stored in its memory. That’s why mobile phone is so popular with people and college students. In my opinion, college students who are born in rich families own cell-phone, I would settle for that case (14). Nevertheless., some who are born in poor families can not bear losing face and then want to own a mobile phone. Frankly speaking,, I don’t eye to eye (15) with them.
Given your family’s condition, you should make a wise and reasonable decision (16). It is very necessary for a college student to consider whether he is suitable for owning a mobile phone (17). After all, mobile phone costs much. As far as we students are concerned, we should take an objective and correct attitude (18) towards mobile phone.

The writer's overall sentence structure is not too bad, however there is not much content here. As with many students, there are a number of errors that affect clarity. Many mistakes are small but easily corrected:
3. The word "for" refers to how long something continued. In this case, the writer is comparing the present with one moment in the past, so "for" should be dropped.
5. Of course, this should be "past", not "part".
8. This does not only refer to one campus but to campuses in many cities. It could be changed to something more specific such as "on campuses all across China".
10. Many things were mentioned earlier. Which one does the writer want to refer to? Most likely, the writer is refering to the previous statistic and so should write specifically "This statistic indicates that...".
11. There is no need for "via it" in this sentence. Just leave it out.
12. The writer must mean "you don't need a notebook".
13. "In that" is too formal and should be used only when explaining a complex argument. "Because" is good enough.
15. The writer missed a word here. It should be "I don't see eye to eye with them".
17. A person is never suitable for owning, at least in today's modern age. Students should consider "whether it is suitable to own" a mobile phone.
Besides these small errors, there are words and expressions that have been completely misused:
2. The expression "in a way" is used when we want to show that this is not necessarily true in all cases. In one way it may be true, but not in all ways. However, in this case, the writer claims that the world has very definitely changed. It is quite literally true, not just "in a way".
4. The writer makes an extreme exaggeration, but claims it is "no exaggeration". It seems the writer is only concerned with writing sentences, rather than with communicating a message.
6. Categories are used to differentiate things, but if all schools are the same, as the writer says by saying there are "no exceptions", then why put schools into a category?
In two places, phrases are totally incomprehensible:
7. Perhaps "cell-phone school" is translated from Chinese, but written here in English, it has no meaning. The writer should explain this expression. Always remember to keep the reader in mind and explain any expressions that may cause confusion.
14. "I would settle for that case" is strange for many reasons. First, why does the writer have to settle for anything? Is there a negotiation going on? Second, what "case" is the writer referring to? Third, why does this statement follow the statement that rich people can buy things, a fact which all human beings are already aware of?
Finally, as with most student compositions, there are many vague, general words and expressions used that simply don't communicate anything real:
1. It would be better if the writer gave an example of this "great convenience".
16. What is a "wise and reasonable" decision? This could mean anything, according to each individual person's opinion!
18. As with "wise and reasonable", "an objective and correct attitude" is determined by each individual's beliefs. In both number 16 and number 18, the writer should give some information - an example or some standard - so that we know what these vague words refer to.
To get an idea of how to be specific, look at number 9, "seven out of ten college students...". This is the only clear example the writer gives us in the whole composition. It is specific, it is clear, it is memorable! Adding more such specific details will improve your writing significantly.
Revised Composition:
Mobile Phones on Campus
The Communication Revolution has changed the way we live, work and have fun. The mobile phone in particular has changed the way we communicate with the world around us. Though mobile phones were a luxury only a few decades ago, they are now considered necessities by many people. This attitude even exists among students on campuses all around China, especially in big cities such as Beijing, Shanghai and Guangzhou.
Statistics show that one out of every seven college students possess a cell phone. The advantages of owning a cell phone are obvious. You can talk with your friends and relatives who may live thousands of miles away. You can carry it wherever you go. You don't need a notebook to store phone numbers because your cell phone has a memory.
Now, I have nothing against students from rich families having cell phones. After all, they can afford it. However, I don't see eye to eye with poor students who only buy cell phones in order to avoid losing face. Considering their families' conditions, they should make the decision to buy a cell phone using reason rather than emotion. All students should try to think objectively before spending their hard earned cash.

Student Composition:
My Dream , My World

I often dream the same dream: I am driving together with my mother on a (1) stretched straight path . The birds are singing and (2) playing around the car, the flowers are (3) opening (4) richly (5) which decorate the land. The breeze is flirting with (6) our hair, my long, black waterfall and my mother’s short gray hair.
This is a lovely dream from which I never want to wake up. (7) Pu Shu also has a dream, “ Gently you passed, like a gust of wind . The instant you touched me I suddenly want to go far far away, to see the colorful world with you.” We have different dreams but meanwhile we have the same carrier to (8) carry our dreams. (9) That is “car”. You may say I am (10) desperately want a car to fulfill my dream , (11) as a matter of fact ,you are wrong ,because I do have a car , the best car in the world, (12) whose brand is not “Lincoln ”, not “Mercedes (13) Bench ” , but “MOTHER”.
Obviously, my car is a special one, but it (14) consists of things with which you (15) can’t be too familiar. Firstly, I have the best engine in the world. (16) That is mother’s HEART. It can be started whenever (17) in need because children are mothers’ (18) haunts forever. (19) Mother’ s heart can (20) start you, can support you, can spur you forward, (21) which is perpetual.
(22) Next to it, I have the best steering wheel. (23) That is mother’s MOUTH. When I am in a (24) mess, it always tells me the truth and guides me out of it; when I am lost, it always points out the right direction; when I am in the wrong, it always gives me the best (25) guidance.
Moreover, the wheels are extremely important. If a car has no wheels, how can it run? (26) Roll like a ball or slip like a train? Here, I have wheels which will never be broken. (27) That is mother’s BACK. Though it is not too strong, it can shift a mountain (28) on; though it is not too straight, it can straighten for me all the roads and streets. It (29) rolled and rolled, mother’s youth (30) was rolled away while my youth blossoms on mother’s back. The cab is also unique. (31) That is mother’s BOSOM. When I am tired, it always gives me the most (32) warmest embrace and comfort ; when lonely , it (33) can always be there to accompany me; when in desperation, it always gives me hope and courage to look forward. Indeed, it is the safest bay after (34) great storm and hurricane, it is the warmest place after severe coldness.
That is my car, priceless and unparalleled. Do I envy the ones driving a car? Yes. But that is temporary. (35) I receive the eternal envy for I deeply know my mother is the best one, the greatest one in the world in my eye. MOTHER is a word which means the world to me. I love my mother.

Student Composition 5: Where is my cheese? This booklet of 90 pages Who Moved My Cheese? is a (1) child's story but (2) also for everyone, and the problem I face to is: What is my cheese? Life is a labyrinth, and cheese is a symbol of what we must to find, pursue in (3) it. From primary school, my cheese is test marks, now, I (4) admitted the college, and gone through my self-examination I paid too much for this cheese. But as the booklet said, (5) none of any cheese was exactly belongs to us; it disappeared when we (6) found it out. That means the marks are not a cheese for my whole life, and the next cheese is my means of livelihood, and when I get it, the next is my work achievement. There is a series of cheeses in front of me, and I don't know what to do with (7) it. I wonder if I can make myself change into the roles of mice "Xiuxiu" and "Congcong", because they can smell varieties of flavor in advance and pull themselves in action, so I did some odd jobs all around myself such as washing clothes and home works in my vocation, and even want to try hire out for work, so that I can get some (8) perceptions, but (9) the social life is (10) just so simple? In fact, I am the roles of pygmy like "Hengheng" and "Jiji" which are (11) changed into complicated by life that means there is (12) no any simple and straight ways (13) here. If you were learned some skills in need that's not enough, and to deal with the intricate interpersonal relationships would more difficult than specific working problems, and to (14) grab a social status would more difficult than to create any achievements. For example, many people who studied lectures (15) behind me but went so far as to become "tutors", but I had to (16) feel ashamed of their inferiority. People can learn from mice but can't change themselves into mice, however, we can do and must do is to exploit (17) something which maybe rebuild us to (18) Somebody. At last, I (19)picked on "Jiji" as my model and prepare for a (20) new marching. I didn't care for "Hengheng", because he never took a step again and got nothing at last. "(21) Owned the related ways before you get the cheeses", that is my conclusion.

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